It's a litte long...but opinions please?

You're right, it is long...too long. I got lost half way through it. It is very nice otherwise, alot of feelings let out, but after reading the second half, all I remember is issues with the sun, and totally forgot what what written in the beginning. It is a start, if your trying to go somewhere with it. Take a break, and read it later and try to sort it out some more, rewrite it so you don't lose the reader with too much detail. I can relate to some of the feelings that you express in this...God bless!